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    dots Submission Name: Blooddots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 60/129/99
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 93
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 453



    Description:
       Just some weapons thoughts and how it is really stupid how we have the most nuclear arms and supposedly we went into the Middle East to stop countries from having nuclear arms.


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    Lock your doors, cover your eyes.
    The terrorists are coming.
    Come on you guys.

    We are so paranoid and covered with fear.
    We lock all our doors.
    But does it kill our fear?

    Gangs and blood cover the country.
    But do they really?
    Or does the media starve the country?

    Defending comfort with nuclear arms.
    Or so they say.
    Nothing is comfortable about bombs.




    Submitted on 2007-10-24 20:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the rhyming in the first stanza. but in the second and third stanzas, you repeated the words fear and country, which lost a little bit of ground. but i loved the last stanza: there's nothing comfortable about bombs. it was so obvious, but no one ever says it like that...very nice.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]



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