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    dots Submission Name: Leave Me Lonelydots
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    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1268



    Description:
       Just in case you don't know..
    Intro = introduction
    Ch. = chorus
    V. = verse
    B. = bridge
    C. = coda

    These lyrics are about loving someone you never thought would leave you, and not being able to let go.


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    dotsLeave Me Lonelydots
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    intro.
    who ever thought that
    you would be the one
    to wipe away all the pain
    only to leave me lonely
    in the end

    ch.
    how could life be so cruel
    to give me everything i
    could ever have asked for
    and then rip it all away
    i could have died then
    but life chose to kill me today
    only to leave me lonely
    all over again

    v1.
    don't tell me to let go
    don't tell me to be strong
    'cause i left all my strength
    back in his arms, in his lips
    he stole it all with that sweet kiss
    i never thought i'd get again

    ch.

    v2.
    his kiss leaves me lonely
    leaves me weak in the knees
    how did all this happen
    went from not bad to much worse
    don't tell me any different
    you're the only one i have had

    b.
    how could you be the one
    to wipe away all the pain
    only to leave me lonely in the end

    ch.

    c.
    how could life be so cruel
    to give me love then rip it away
    how could you leave me lonely
    how could you leave me lonely
    in the end




    Submitted on 2007-10-24 23:40:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well done! i can hear this as a song when i read it...this is unusual for me...most of the time when people post lyrics i cant put a tune to it...this one reads like a song..i hope that makes sense....IMO you have done a great job...stormy
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel ur pain
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by asian blonde | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this Kriss, it is well writtin and a good one to come back with! I love the way it ends with the line
    "in the end"
    as well, it really adds something to the climax. I would love to hear this to music! Great piece Kriss, keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww...I know exactly how you feel.

    I had never loved anyone in my life...then my ex came along...I loved him more than I could have ever imagined I would...and he left...

    don't tell me to let go
    don't tell me to be strong
    'cause i left all my strength
    back in his arms, in his lips
    he stole it all with that sweet kiss
    i never thought i'd get again

    And I felt exactly like that...

    amazing job...thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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