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    dots Submission Name: time's updots
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    Author: Polydectes
    ASL Info:    26/m/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 144/72/34
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotstime's updots
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    Since the times of the old and young the clock
    Will tick tock at its own time though the night
    But the night holds its own rhythm and time
    And the dark will still know how to conceal.

    But to what extent will the dark conceal
    While patience takes only one trick of time
    And to some the waiting feels like the clock
    Only to wait through the darkness of night.

    And inside its darkest hour of night
    He still sees the safety in the dark clock
    It is only to try and to conceal
    This is only one moment in our time.

    It knows your time, in the darkness of night
    You can not conceal, your tick in the clock.




    Submitted on 2007-10-25 10:05:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the way it's written, I got interested on it because of it's tittle.

    "But to what extent will the dark conceal
    While patience takes only one trick of time
    And to some the waiting feels like the clock
    Only to wait through the darkness of night."

    That was nice, really, you just inspired meh to write something else..!

    with insanity,
    Sofie
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome write. its very real. its those unending nights that u keep on looking at the clock thinking and going crazy and times a - creeping slowly.

    "And inside its darkest hour of night
    He still sees the safety in the dark clock
    It is only to try and to conceal
    This is only one moment in our time."


    that dark clock with its false sence of security...
    u cant deny the inevitable.


    peace
    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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