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    dots Submission Name: hi, i hopedots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotshi, i hopedots
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    you know that i only meant well
    and know that hell that i put you through was always supposed to be heaven
    i hope the clouds that i cast block out the harsh son
    Apart from the physical attachments,
    these hurtful little pricks and prods are like jobs
    it runs me ragged in retrospection
    allow me a second to apologize to your hazel eyes
    and let my lies tell you goodbye
    because i,
    somehow, i surmise that some day down the line
    you'll see the scar on your stomach as art
    and i'll be in the beret




    Submitted on 2007-10-25 11:09:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know exactly how you feel. Well maybe not exactly, but I think you catch my drift. I just moved out of my house and I don't think I realized how much my mother did for me in my life. This write is so true and just...
    Its amazing. I thank you so much for giving me this feeling. I wouldn't dare change a thing. perfect.

    - Kyle
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    | Posted on 2008-09-12 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...deep.

    I think this is pretty awesome.

    I really like these lines:

    you know that i only meant well
    and know that hell that i put you through was always supposed to be heaven
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an amzing write where a Son Puts his Heart on the line and Thanks his Mom for everything She has done to help him move forward
    I swear to you I could have written this same write almost word to word to my own Mother
    So many times in life I hurt her so
    Now I am 38 years old and Honestly she is and always will be my Best Friend
    She is disabled and I live with her to help her with everyday tasks and Move Forward
    If I were you I would show this to your Mother
    It will bring Tears to both of your eyes im sure
    But trust me on this those tears will be healing tears helping you both to re recognize the Love you Share
    I will be Praying for you Both
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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