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    dots Submission Name: What the hell is this¿dots
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    Author: SKillz_Heckle
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Tha BRIARWOOD!!
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 268/173/39
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 363
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Did he really do it, did he really learn chinese to become communist?


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    dotsWhat the hell is this¿dots
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    I used to be admired
    desired. until I became expired
    I grew up in the "hood"
    always up to no good
    doing only what I want,
    never doing what I should
    and it's a damn shame
    it happened in the same frame
    and as I look back to it
    only I was to blame
    stupidity, to let you within my complex
    cassette decks play my life
    over and over, and whats next
    you thought I did it for the money
    but it wasn't that my friend
    I did it for the laugh I would get in the end
    and I did, I got it and it made me glad
    to see everyone around smile
    when they used to be sad
    I never thought I was a hero
    when I was doing it for the De niro
    but since it wasn't that
    my life amounted to a zero
    and it pains me to see my homies
    playing other songs
    smoking out of bongs
    never righting all their fucking wrongs
    from up here, I see clear
    from the front and from the rear
    and all the light I shown on you
    made you all so insincere
    It doesn't matter, can't remember
    what its all about
    thoughout this whole thing
    my mind reversed an inner shout
    This ain't a poem, this is rambling from within
    I've never wrote a poem in my life
    and with that I'll let this end.........




    Submitted on 2004-06-23 03:38:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "cassette decks play my life"

    This was a (for lack of a better word) great line.
    It had me thinking back to all the oldies that used to play in the background everytime we lit a bombfire and cracked open a 40oz.

    My life's cassette would have to be Brenton Wood...

    anyhoo I liked how you state at the end that you have never written a poem you just write your life...lets me know you are your own person and not just up in here posting to hear "ohhhh your such a wonderful writer"
    | Posted on 2005-03-22 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Really different from a lot of the sappy [censored] a lot of people are writing. I liked that you made it random but made it all tie togetehr and i have no idea what that means but i liked it. You're an awesome writer. I like being confused and you definitly acheived that. lol.
    | Posted on 2004-09-05 00:00:00 | by Dead Weight | [ Reply to This ]
      yup i got lost... what does chinese and comunism have to do with your poem? but thats ok... moving right along... i think mostly i just liked the first two lines... and id say more but im so not knowing what its actually all about (no offence)
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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