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    dots Submission Name: Of Spiderwebs, Flowers and Sunsetsdots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 329/334/138
    Words: 294
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 136
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1885



    Description:
       There are some inside things here that none of you will get, or maybe you will, if you have a lover as wonderful as mine.

    Don't bash me for not understanding. Just feel please.


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    dotsOf Spiderwebs, Flowers and Sunsetsdots
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    There is no downside to being in love.
    There are hard times, times here and times there,
    But never any time where I regret
    giving myself, or as much of myself as I can muster
    Directly and Solely to you.

    I do not regret the times when you cry,
    or when I cry.
    They show me that I'm still alive
    that I'm still breathing,
    that we're still human,
    in this inhuman world
    from which we hail.

    And even if we're the only two left,
    the only two realities in the world
    of illusions and ephemerants,
    I would gladly take it over being alone
    sequestered as I was in a place of blindness.

    I do not regret the angry times.
    Though I still must ask forgiveness for mine
    They show me that I'm not perfect, true,
    but they prove I'm not perfectly bad.
    They put a little grey in our white ways
    and black ways.

    I do not fear picking up the phone,
    putting the reciever to my ear,
    and hearing your voice spill forth.
    I can find no reason to,
    I can't even find a reason to hesitate.

    There are only upsides to this thing.
    This entity that lives with me,
    In my chest, and on most occassions,
    the reflections on my wrist.
    All the little "me"s that you've
    so graciously thought to give,
    to live so close to me.
    All the smells of you that faintly
    place themselves on those globes.

    I can remember only Spider Webs and Flowers.
    The way you stare into the sunset,
    and maybe you're wishing you were there,
    Inside that bright place.
    But if you do, I can hope but one thing.

    That you wish I was there with you.




    Submitted on 2007-10-25 22:12:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I get it. Anyone else who gets IT understands what you wrote here.

    It would be so much more romantic if you deleted the last line in the fourth stanza though, but thats just me.

    Hoooray love.



    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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