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    dots Submission Name: Rescueddots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    32/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 86/94/59
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
    Total Views: 98
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1039



    Description:
       No more bruises
    no more broken bones.
    No more beatings
    with bats and phones.


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    Hush sweet child
    dry your eyes.
    You're safe now forever
    it's all right.

    No more sadness
    no more pain.
    He'll never again hurt you
    or scream out your name.

    You're mommy is coming
    you won't be alone.
    She'll be safe here with you
    you won't be hungry or cold.

    No more bruises
    no more broken bones.
    No more beatings
    with bats and phones.

    No more touching
    of that private place.
    Only love and warmth
    I give to replace.

    Food and laughter
    kisses and hugs.
    A world so much better
    that anything that was.

    Look sweet child
    you're mommy is here.
    Just like I promised
    and I'll always be near.

    That man who once hurt you
    is gone from your life.
    You're safe now in Heaven
    no more will you cry.


    October 25,2007




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      This was...... I don't think there is a word to describe it. Magnificent....no....Fantastic....no..... It was boitayamingmaha. Yeah, that's fits it. It was sad, hopeful, loving, and perfect. I love it. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2007-10-27 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't change this one bit. I love it. Your fourth stanza is perfect. You rhyming is dead on and you used some of my favorite words to use here, too (hugs, was) But hey, as to the actually write itself, it's not shabby, in fact I say it is...hm... super exceptional? okay, yeah that sounds about right. Abuse is never okay, hurt is never okay, but the pain they give are the ashes we rise from and at the end of the day we become better persons for it. Thank you, your work is beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      i couldn't help but fight back the tears while reading this. perhaps the most heartfelt, gripping words i've read on this site. "He heals the broken hearted and binds up their wounds."

    peace....


    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      im not going to lie this actaully made me want to cry and reminded me of the martina mcbride song about the little girl who was abused. goodwrite
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]



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