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    dots Submission Name: Whateverdots

    Author: psyko
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 376/168/66
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       it's whatever I guess.

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    I pity her soul, for she knows not what she's done,
    She's led me blind to believe, that she's the only one.
    I fell for the lies she told to always get her way,
    And left myself empty; my whole heart I gave away.
    I'd hoped to make a family, with her always by my side.
    She told me that's what she wanted, and took me for a ride.
    To this day I can't understand, the evil behind her eyes,
    The death that she can cause; the woman that I despise.

    Yesterday has gone away, and today I've nothing left to give.
    Tomorrow will be a new day, but do I really want to live?
    A man can become such a child when he thinks with his heart.
    I was mistaking to believe that she would always do her part.
    I held on to a false hope, of having what I've never had.
    A partner to love and be loved by; I never stood a chance.
    What can I really say, she found my weakness and proceded to press.
    She tricked me into destroying myself, by giving her my best.

    Today I am empty, robbed of the good inside myself.
    She took all the love I gave, and set it on a shelf.
    She left to find another victim, to give her what she wants.
    Leaving me broken and thrown aside, but the pain never stops.
    She made me weaker, by playing each weakness she found,
    And when I reach, begging for mercy, she isn't anywhere around.
    Yesterday has gone away, and today I've nothing left to share.
    Tomorrow will I even be alive?

    Ask me if I care.

    Submitted on 2007-10-26 00:02:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice. Really I liked it. I don't know what else to say, but it was good, and well written.

    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a fantastic write. I loved it. It flowed magnificently well. I can't relate to this, but I know my dad can. He's going through the same thing......again. I hope you find someone for you. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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