Description: haiku are supposed to be about nature, and what's more natural than DNA. These are loosely connected, but not as cohesive as I would've liked.
DNA (haiku) -------------------------------------------
molecules kissing
twist in a festival that
spirals toward life
miniature ladders
twirl into intricate twine
woven by Divine
patchworks grafted in
blending myriads of patterns
to blanket the earth
Ah, this is something I would think of writing in science while contemplating the poetic merits to biology and such :) You did a nice job of making something very "sciencey" sound beautifully poetic.
This was a very good piece, everything fitted in perfectly. The only thing that I didn't like about it was how you had D: first stanza N: second stanza and then A: third stanza ... if you catch my drift. It just sort of took out the bit of mystery I thought this piece contained. Other than that, great work!
Very Origanel and I must say exceptionally well written
I too have experimented with continuous Haiku poems and I know they are not easy to write but once they come together they are really art
Great Job!!!
God Bless
Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
I really like this..its original...and a very lovely way to describe DNA...i had never thought of it in this context before but you are absolutely right ...i know nothing of haiku so cannot comment on its form...but i really liked it it has a very nice feel to it...stormy
Submission Name: DNA (haiku)
