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    dots Submission Name: DNA (haiku)dots
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    Author: nicelyJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999/519/73
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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    Description:
       haiku are supposed to be about nature, and what's more natural than DNA. These are loosely connected, but not as cohesive as I would've liked.


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    dotsDNA (haiku)dots
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    molecules kissing
    twist in a festival that
    spirals toward life


    miniature ladders
    twirl into intricate twine
    woven by Divine


    patchworks grafted in
    blending myriads of patterns
    to blanket the earth


    NicelyJ




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      Ah, this is something I would think of writing in science while contemplating the poetic merits to biology and such :) You did a nice job of making something very "sciencey" sound beautifully poetic.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a very good piece, everything fitted in perfectly. The only thing that I didn't like about it was how you had D: first stanza N: second stanza and then A: third stanza ... if you catch my drift. It just sort of took out the bit of mystery I thought this piece contained. Other than that, great work!

    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2007-10-27 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Very clever, absolutely true, and lovely work with the form! I could not resist taking a peek and was definitely not disappointed. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Very Origanel and I must say exceptionally well written
    I too have experimented with continuous Haiku poems and I know they are not easy to write but once they come together they are really art
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this..its original...and a very lovely way to describe DNA...i had never thought of it in this context before but you are absolutely right ...i know nothing of haiku so cannot comment on its form...but i really liked it it has a very nice feel to it...stormy
    | Posted on 2007-10-26 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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