Description: was just looking at a poster in the classroom and all of the poem just came into my head i hope you really enjoy this poem.
life of a tree -------------------------------------------
as i look upon the stump in front of me i wounder how it came to be a little old stump home for termites that there home was once a living tree. who's leaves were as green as the grass in the summer and it leaves as colorful as the embers of a fire in the fall. and all that life has been taken away never to see another day.
True...the ever-fading beauty of nature, taken over by the same force. Even by us at times, destroyed to fill a purpose and pollute our environment. Transitions and everything was overall smooth, little repetitive, not sure how go that passes over...few grammical errors, who doesn't have 'em?
Anyway, have a happy thanksgiving, ( I know it's late) and keep penning.
Vencix
You have a True talent of showing the Inner Beauty of Nature
Something others take for Granted
This was really beautiful
Showing how even though the Tree has died it is still a home to other life
Absolutely Beautiful
We as Humans have so much to Learn from this Tree
God Bless
Ron
Some of the very best poetry comes from simple observations such as this one. I enjoyed your look at nature!
There are few grammar/misspelling errors that can be easily fixed:
"who's" (who is) should read "whose"
"wounder" - "wonder"
"it leaves" - "its leaves"
I look forward to reading more nature writes from you!
Everthing flowed very fluently. Transitions were smooth between lines. I liked the nature and elemental theme and content of the piece, as well as the slight rhyming of words.
hah. this is nice, it put me in a good mood. :]] i really like the opening: "as i look upon the stump in front of me i wounder how it came to be a little old stump home for termites" and "leaves as colorful as the embers of a fire in the fall".
however, it does begin to feel a little repetitive
Submission Name: life of a tree
