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    dots Submission Name: The Earth's Fiery Loverdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I know that the earth and moon are traditionally considered female, but I made the moon male in this.


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    dotsThe Earth's Fiery Loverdots
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    The sun is the earth's fiery lover,
    and the moon sits by barren and cold
    head down in shame,
    for he was jilted
    for his ashen, pockmarked face.




    Submitted on 2004-06-23 06:48:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey cuddy thank you for your comments on my piece...it comes from the heart and bares no other. For this piece it's wonderful like a lover's spat or a love-triangle and by telling "their" story, many can relate to feeling such a rejection. Bravo.

    ~mawwy~
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by mawwy | [ Reply to This ]
      How sad!
    incidentally, in indian mythology, the sun and moon are male and the earth female.
    was the repetition of "for" in lines four and five intentional?
    | Posted on 2004-06-25 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      this made me want to cry for the poor moon! makes me sad to think of him ashamed of his face, but then i would think like that! i liked this. short and to the point, as usual. cliché or not, doesn't something become cliché because it works so well?!
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually, the sun was once considered female and the moon was male. Tolkien used those versions in his book as well. Some Paganism still holds extremely fast in modern civilisation, and it is through celtic and roman deities that the moon and sun are now widely regarded as female and male.

    I do think it's a sweet sentiment, and I like that the moon is pockmarked and rejected, but I do this it's just a small bright piece of poetry that isn't great, certainly isn't bad, but just nice enough to bring a smile and an "aaah!"
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      The Sun is hellishly hot. The Moon is the glowing pearl of the night. All those pocks just add character. The Earth is just swirly craziness. In fact, the sun orbits the earth and the earth orbits the moon. It's called Lunacentric. This poem made me think of stupid things like that. Um, not a bad write, but not moving. (I'm not sure poetry has to be moving to be good, but that seems to be everyone else's take)
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, the moon is traditionally considered to be female. but who cares?? your images are great as always. poor moon. well he gets some light too. otherwise we wouldn't see him. anyway great poem. I ebjoyed reading very much.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      thepoor little moon and his pockmarked face..nice little write...i love it...i like how you described the sun as the earths fiery lover..

    smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


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