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    dots Submission Name: Crooked Maskdots
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    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 771
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    Bytes: 552



    Description:
       Just kind of a more abstract prose than poem but I am going to call it poetry anyway.


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    dotsCrooked Maskdots
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    The bears are all along the walls,
    And I am sitting here in mourn.
    The train is rushing down the street,
    And I am lost inside my head.
    The warmth of fear and war is
    Covering our lonely souls.
    The leaves are all fun but
    Not like when we begun.
    I want it back and can't react
    To anything correctly now.

    The pain is gone.
    The pain is gone.
    The trip is done.
    The trip is done.
    It all ended fast.
    And now I wear a crooked mask.




    Submitted on 2007-10-27 13:01:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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