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    dots Submission Name: When You Love Someone Elsedots

    Author: juss_kriss
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 404/445/126
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 746
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       Basically about being in an "unofficial" relationship with someone. You have claims on them, everything physical and emotional is still involved, but since you're not really together, all you have is the right to bitch if you mess around or end up dating someone else.

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    dotsWhen You Love Someone Elsedots

    all those lies you told me
    are but bullshit well told
    'cause she knows their meaning too
    for me those words have grown cold
    every feeling that's never left
    now grows strong in her heart
    and i can't help but die
    whenever we end up apart

    my love, our love
    was never enough
    though it's twisted now
    i knew not what it was
    to be thrown away so easily
    just to keep a tight grip
    of everything that used to be
    my heart can't take it
    when you love someone else

    every kiss that i savored
    was a kiss well wasted
    for as your lips touched her own
    she knew just how it tasted
    every touch that i remember
    is a touch she now knows
    and i can't help but cry
    for this is how it always goes

    she has found what i have lost
    but for her it comes
    at no second cost
    what was so unconditional and free
    belongs to her and no longer me
    she's scared to lose you
    and at first i was too
    but i've lost you so many times
    that it's really nothing new

    my love, our love
    was never enough
    but yet you still kiss me
    when you love someone else

    Submitted on 2007-10-27 18:02:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is soooooo good Kriss I love it. The lines:
    "every kiss that i savored
    was a kiss well wasted
    for as your lips touched her own
    she knew just how it tasted"
    pure geniouse in words! As always with most of your work I love it. And wish I could hear it put to music, I swear you will be famouse one day if you go for it. THis is so full of raw emotion and writtin very eliquently. Great piece, keep writing.

    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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