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    dots Submission Name: I am aniMatron.dots
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    Author: awastedsky
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 103/119/79
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 130
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    Description:
       Probably unfinished, rough

    I just wanted to write again.


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    dotsI am aniMatron.dots
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    Property of the tired, the poor
    the huddled masses yearning to scam welfare money off the system.
    Creator of light and simulator of dark
    I am the face you want to see in the mirror, but I was made and I have no gratitude
    I am aniMatron.

    Mother of 21st-century art
    Singularity, teacher-television and the price of flawless desperation
    Every street-smart, tobacco-teenage lady's best nightmare
    Because book-intelligence is simply overrated.

    Love-lust, and hate-fucking are my everyday activities
    Sometimes I get all the buttons mixed up, and then I feel stupid.
    Please excuse me while I purge my breakfast, lunch and intellect
    Please excuse me while I forget what yesterday I learned.




    Submitted on 2007-10-28 02:41:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      oof! is modern living all that bad? I liked the wordplay with "animatron"... like matronly... motherly... heh
    I'm in a rush but I just wanted to tell you good job on this poem, I especially like your writing style. you have a clear, confident narrative voice and very distinct, jarring, (in a good way!) choices in words. I'll have to check out some of your other stuff. yay!
    | Posted on 2007-10-29 00:00:00 | by Kristen Gudsnuk | [ Reply to This ]
       Thoughts of a 17 year old but they're so much more mature than that. It's crazy. I love it, though. Nice work. I didn't think a 17 year old could think such a way...probably because I'm 17 and don't have these thoughts. Hah. Sort of self centered, huh?


    But yeah, it was really good, I loved it.
    | Posted on 2007-10-29 00:00:00 | by Secrets Unheard | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool piece. It's good to get writing. This may be rough, as you said, but I have to admit, it is pretty good.

    I sounds kind of like a futuristic slum. It is quite true of the lives of many people today. I really hope something like this never happens to me.

    Money, why have you brought the whole world to its knees?!

    This reminds me a little bit of the 3rd Impression of the multi-part song Karn Evil 9 by Emerson, Lake and Palmer. There is an intelligent computer who kind of has a battle with the humans. Or something like that:

    "No man yields who flies in my ship
    DANGER!
    Let the bridge computer speak
    STRANGER!
    LOAD YOUR PROGRAM. I AM YOURSELF.
    ....
    I am all there is
    NEGATIVE! PRIMITIVE! LIMITED! I LET YOU LIVE!
    But I gave you life
    WHAT ELSE COULD YOU DO?
    To do what was right
    I'M PERFECT! ARE YOU?"

    The computer's voice is the words in all caps. It's pretty awesome and yet slightly creepy. That's what your piece made me think of.

    This is well done. Keep on writing!





    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]


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