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    dots Submission Name: to my only sondots

    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this is to my 6 month old son carmon alexander grethen i love him very much me and his dad is going threw a divoce and he is in department of social servicess custody if i dont get him back before the 24 of october in 2008 i will never get him back they took him because i put his dad in jail for domestic violence and they saw me a young unfit mother for him well i am open to all critics and i hope to get some kind of reply thank you for reading this one it has my heart and soul in it

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    dotsto my only sondots

    I just bought
    Your first ornament today
    Even though your not here
    And I wont get to see you
    I just wanted to let you know
    That I still love you
    And im always thinking of you
    You mean every thing to me
    I donít know what im going to do
    If I cant get you back with me
    I get to see you every Wednesday
    For just an hour
    Is that going to be enough
    For you to remember me
    I hope you do
    Im joining the army for you
    Going threw boot camp will be hard
    Cause for eight weeks
    I wont get to see your smiling face
    Youíre my angel in disguise
    The one who has rescued me
    I wont to spend every moment with you
    But I know that cant be
    I just hope when you get older
    And I tell you all that I have done
    You donít hate me for my choices
    Cause their the only ones I see
    That will get you back with me
    I love you Carmon

    Submitted on 2007-10-28 09:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it is beautiful that you wrote a poem to your son.Don't worry you will get him back.Don't listen to negative people like the person above. They don't know the things you have to go through.Don't worry he will see that ornament. Best wishes to you.
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      1. First things first
    wont to spend every moment with you
    change it to want to

    2. dv? dss? please expand. Do not get what it is.

    First if ou really like your son see where he can grow well.
    a. Do you have a secure job and what is your husband doing. Why did you throw him in jail.
    b. If your husband likes your son the same way and he is well settled then i know this is harsh to say but it is better that he be with his dad.
    c. If not then you better take him back.
    d. Why did they see you as a unfit mother. I wouldsay you to get a job first and start earning from now.. Are you going fo the army then thats a different issue. Is ityour country or your son make up your mind.

    If you want to be with your son then do the above.
    | Posted on 2007-10-29 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      why doesnt any one want to comment on this poem ive had so many look at it but no one is saying a word why? please if your the next person so look at this please say something about it thank you and have a great day
    | Posted on 2007-10-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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