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    dots Submission Name: Bendingdots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    17/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 12/17/34
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 209
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 465



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    Short breaths
    Red cheeks
    Rapid heart beats

    Death or birth?
    Which will be the outcome?
    Of this heat raging hearth

    Will a dagger
    Pierce and wound
    Or leave with all its haggard

    Thoughts spinning
    Eyes blurring
    Ideas of self-sinning

    Is this the begging or the end?
    How strange things work
    When the mind bends






    Submitted on 2007-10-29 12:03:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, it's like a stream of a weird conciousness. thoughts rabbled down and yet it gives something. It is beautiful in a sense, sometimes i see a red line through it... sometimes i don't.
    reminds me of the path my mind takes when it's alone at night.
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by Wolfie | [ Reply to This ]


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