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    dots Submission Name: End of the Battledots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    17/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 12/17/34
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 168
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    dotsEnd of the Battledots
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    A blank stare
    Almost lifeless body
    This must be and empty capsule

    So hollow this one seems
    Yet a battle of blood erupted inside

    Mind wrapping tighter
    Insides squirming like worms
    Nerves twitching frantically
    Heart fights against it all

    Eyelids started to sink
    Between he limp hanging
    And plain glare

    One could assume that the battle here
    Was lost

    They just wouldn’t expect to hear
    That the hostility was against itself




    Submitted on 2007-10-29 12:03:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well done, this kind of battle is my fate!
    The awesome's, a symphonic that i love.

    Yours
    H.Redd
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by H.Redd | [ Reply to This ]
      This is scary!! But I love it!
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by Randa04 | [ Reply to This ]


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