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    dots Submission Name: Lover's Reverie dots

    Author: tennisfuzz
    ASL Info:    21/F/wandering.
    Elite Ratio:    5.72 - 79/98/40
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Not my best... but wanted to be written

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    dotsLover's Reverie dots

    My worldly Heaven
    My dearest Nirvana
    Whisper into my ear, won’t you please
    You are my second skin, a mate for my soul

    My succulent Nectar
    My exquisite Truffle
    Let me taste, feel, your lips
    Your soft breath drowns my senses

    My valiant Leo
    My everlasting Luna
    Sooth me with your musings
    You have captured my ardent adoration

    Submitted on 2007-10-29 21:15:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha, I havn't read your stuff in awhile, so I'm doing some catching up.

    Sorry i've been so absent lately, I've been dealing with some heavy stuff, and it's been taking up a lot of my time...

    ANYWAY, on to your peice. I thought it was beautiful, but far too short lived for my taste.

    I like the feeling, but I feel as if it were a fleeting moment, but the words give me otherwise...

    I dunno, maybe I'm overthinking because it's 1 in the morning and I can't sleep, but I want to hear more...

    Wishing for more
    | Posted on 2007-12-10 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty cool and sweet. There are many good phrasings of feelings that we all have at some point for someone. The format allows smooth reading, but some editing/adding to the work could make it have more of an impact. Just a thought. Nice write.

    | Posted on 2007-11-15 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I like this. It's just...nice. Written vibrantly enough not to be cliché, run of the mill love poetry, but it seems to make use of the classic sense of delirious love for a girl who is angelic in her lovers eyes....

    I don't have a favorite stanza, really. I like every one. To be honest, it would go very well on a Valentine's Day card...but that's not always a bad thing.

    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]

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