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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 34/16/21
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    I put on this face
    to get me ready for another day

    this face that they all see
    the confidence
    the self- assurance
    the strength
    this face only hides the pain

    but I have to be strong
    so strong
    strong for them
    strong for those whom I love
    because the sun is shining so bright
    even when my world is dark

    so I put on this face
    hoping that it will get me through
    yet another day

    I put on this face
    thinking it will make me stronger
    but what lurks beneath the surface
    it only make me weaker

    maybe I need to face the deaths
    the friendships lost
    the judgments
    the insecurities
    maybe that’s what I need to do

    but for now
    I put on this face
    telling myself
    that tomorrow
    the darkness that consumes me
    will perish
    and the pain that overcomes me
    will disappear

    I put on this face
    the face of a hero
    as the coward steps down




    Submitted on 2007-10-29 21:47:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice poem yo. Its good. and its okay to put on a face. It makes other people happy and u can sometimes lose urself in it for those few moments.


    yah swell write


    stay gold
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    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      what you have written about is something that most readers can identify with and this is seen in the volume of pieces this site contains about the same subject.
    and because so many people have written about masks and facades its really hard to write something that hasnt been written before.

    because of all of that i want to say i have read this before in so many forms and expressions that it is hard to know what to say.

    i think if you are going to write about masks and fronting as someone you arent and if you are looking to set yourself apart from all the other pieces maybe read some of the other pieces and see what theyve done and try to do something opposite/different.


    as for mask wearing itself...
    sometimes pain and darkness is only made worse by supressing it... sometimes a little light and fresh air and love does pain and darkness the world of good...
    usually the weakness we see in ourselves is rarely seen by others...

    good luck.
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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