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    dots Submission Name: Systematic Theory of Unsuspecting Obsessiondots

    Author: Nashataku
    ASL Info:    25/M/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 374/465/70
    Words: 554
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Not much more to say other than the way I was feeling at the time

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    dotsSystematic Theory of Unsuspecting Obsessiondots

    Systematic Theory of Unsuspecting Obsession

    Sit here with uninked letters
    Tell your feelings
    Tell your fears
    I am here, I'll comfort you

    You can't comfort me
    You just say your words
    Expect my angst
    Write down my tears

    No I won't
    I really care
    Just say your words
    I listen with no delay

    Fine I will say my words
    Behind painted lines

    (Psychologist squints his eyes pondering)

    (Patient) (continues):
    Unleash my feelings to you
    In these lines painted
    By insignificant data frames
    Read this and nod your head like a good critic
    But don't embrace the luxury of my feelings
    As if everyone is allowed inside my cubicle
    But not realizing you were one of the chosen few

    Space given to me to not
    Get cut by the knives to my left and right
    Shut the door to the heart-built cubicle
    Only not to let you in
    And feel the breeze of alaska as I look at you
    Ignore it and give unholocaust thoughts
    And let it escape like a gutless coward

    Never give thoughts that these jagged eyes
    Truly show resentment to you
    And instead embrace my kindness like tropical flowers
    Only showing your ruff side as you destem me
    But rub me gently as you desire my sent

    Then on the other side you build me up
    Promote my self image while inside hold contentious verbs
    Ignoring the years of integrity
    Instead wrap my name in your brain
    Using it as an excuse for your self-contious
    Don't admit your faults
    But instead find faults
    In those outside your mirror

    Listen to sickle vipers
    With no lies to live
    So instead imput lives
    Into lies to see a brightness to there life
    Hiss at me with there voice
    Putting clues to things
    Without a clue
    But instead you smile as your
    Intelligence lies

    Believing inside of yourself
    You have everything under control
    But your control is compromised
    Now you must heal
    Since you know best
    You take no kind words
    Do things your own way

    I sit back without devious eyes
    Planning to hope for better
    But instead as the viper toys with my ear
    I get turned on and eaten by a desireable succubus
    Now wrapped in mysterious foreplay
    And feeling the pain drain from unselfish play
    Open ones eyes to jonting orgasms
    To finish another time

    Look inside myself and see no spawn
    No one to ask if they are mine
    To tell oneself that it is dissapointing
    But figure that you are one spawn
    Not meant to be reproduced
    A seed of this seed the opitome
    Of wasted DNA
    No need for another JAP on this surface

    So alone I sit hearing these twisted whispers
    That you say are not existent
    But they are all around
    In everything I do
    And every place I go
    Incircled inside of this non-existent world
    That I am made to believe is not existing
    So you can continue to play me as a fool
    Understand I play your game
    But its okay
    Since you can never read my riddle

    (Patient Pauses and exhales)(continues softly):

    Riddle me this
    Riddle me that
    Figure my riddle
    As I sit on this thimble

    Aka Nashataku

    Submitted on 2007-10-30 02:39:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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