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    dots Submission Name: Promise me dots

    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 981
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       this is something it threw together i know there is spelling mistakes let me know how u feel about it

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    dotsPromise me dots

    Promise me

    her skin is soft
    her hair smells sweet
    she looks at you
    with worried eyes
    her lips begin to quiver
    and her hands begin to shake
    she reaches out
    and takes your hand
    she looks at you
    tears running down her face
    she pulls you in
    her lips touch yours
    her kiss is soft
    deep and passionate
    an then
    she lets you go
    and slowely whispers
    "put your arms around me,
    never let go.
    Promise me
    we wont fall apart"

    Submitted on 2007-10-30 02:44:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really nice and sweet, I enjoyed it thoroughly, Nice write
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it all tge way to the end. The last line just threw it all out there. I think you should add more or fix the line. Other than that, it was awesome. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    »MIss MIsery«
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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