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    dots Submission Name: Love?dots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       This is just a bit of a rant. I know its a bit darker and angrier than my usual stuff...but I needed to vent.


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    dotsLove?dots
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    Is it love that makes him hit you
    and listen to your screams?
    Is it love that traps you there
    as the pain destroys your dreams?

    Was it love that killed your child?
    Is it love that makes you bleed?
    Is it love that makes you take it all
    and never lets you leave?

    How can you call it love?
    How can you not see?
    You deserve so much more
    but this love won't set you free.




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      I really enjoyed reading this, I hate that it comes from a place like that though, but your able to write about it in a very beautiful way. like i said in the other comment I hope things work out, its such a terrible situation to be in. But I think, it might be improtant to say, even though its not my place, that its not her that needs to be questioned. What I mean is that in any situation that deals with abuse the abused is normal told to leave or questioned why they dont just leave but its never looked at from there perspective sometims its not as easy as just walk away, theres alot that plays into things like this, not just love. But yea great poem and I hope you dont mind the random inter-personal mode I took with the comment, not trying to bagger or anything.
    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      hey it sounds like your in a bad spot and i really think you should get out of whatever you are in. i really hope you feel better. this is not love at all that is making him hit you. if you guys really are in love then he wouldnt do that. if you guys want to really work this out you should try to suggest therapy for couples or something. if hes getting too verbally out of control you could ask him if its ok to make a code word that you could throw out at each other when your words start to hurt each other. it gonna be okay. just try to get through it. but at the same time if he doesnt stop, try to get out.






    tina
    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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