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    dots Submission Name: Birth Betrayaldots
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    Author: Drowning Daisy
    ASL Info:    25/Lady/England
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 6/9/6
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 381
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1532



    Description:
       This was inspired by a friends of my mother who have been trying for children for years without success.

    The idea of not being able to have children is, to me, terrible. If I were told that I could not create a life I would break. I realize that not everyone feels this way but with this piece I wanted to convey myself and my feelings towards the subject. I know women who are unable to carry and give birth to children and I feel so terrible for them; I cannot begin the imagine the pain they feel. I hope you will understand the thoughts and emotions I have tried to express through this piece of writing.


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    dotsBirth Betrayaldots
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    Her ovaries lay in her basket of memories
    Upon ripped tissue and numb transparency
    Like eggs dropped from the bird of sorrow,
    Soft, white and hollow - the image of her body
    as it stood in acknowledgment of herself.

    At the peak of her mountain of dreams
    She balances trust with stale promises
    And quivers like the frail stillborn-bones,
    She collapses
    She falls
    She crumbles

    down like the landslide she is
    Falling at the feet of her giants
    - her demons; she crashes into angels
    In a mass of heart tissue
    and shattered reverie.

    Her skin clings to her as a cage
    Blocking her, pushing her into unreality,
    Iron faces push back the factual
    She is fiction, raw fantasy.

    Her seeds of creation have fallen
    from her as translucent children
    Mis-formed. De-formed. Missing.
    This unwoman lacks definition
    She's confined beyond the rational.

    Swathed in illusion she is elusive
    A figure of perfectly clouded clarity,
    Bathed in trauma
    She is beyond comprehension.
    The lack of genre fixes her fleeting. A wreck.

    Soured thoughts, bitter headed
    The unfemale is hidden
    beneath the soft bodywork.
    She is a foreigner within her own
    body. She is her own foreign body,
    - pinched lips, steel eyed.

    And she plummets.




    Submitted on 2007-10-30 16:53:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've read this many times over, and I hate that I don't have anything constructive to say about anything you write. Not because I wish you to be worse, (though that would make me look better... lol just kidding.) but because I feel like I am only wasting your time with a comment such as this one... It is simply that I couldn't come back here, read it and leave again without giving you some kind of kudos. This is heartbreaking, and beautiful.
    Welcome to Eliteskills, and thank you for sharing your talent with us.
    | Posted on 2007-10-30 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]



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