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Incomplete Rebirth


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Words: 138
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Serious
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I was born, but I was not.


Incomplete Rebirth



I’m writing again
This time, using some other
Poor writer’s hand.
This hand I talk of –
- Well, let’s not bother with that
But the things I write of
Are not the usual stuff.

I can’t seem to find the
Meaning, says Andy.

Where’s the symbolism,
Says Christy.

And let’s not even get to
Ronny, who doesn’t even exist.

Such poor talks make for
Poor conversations.
The only hand that would
Bother to write of them
Is a lonely one.
This hand I talk of
Communicates through
The dashes of my fingers,

And edits through the films
Of my eyes.
But no longer is it connected
To my body.
And least of all, my heart.




Submitted on 2007-10-30 19:51:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  o
kay.

well.

uh..

I have nothing to say

literaly.
except that your poems are getting less and less deep.
Such as this one.
Or maybe you're trying the new trend of everyone writing like crap.

not that you wrote like crap.
It's just that you always write things with deep meaning.
I'm jst not used to it.

oh...and putting my name on here made this poem extra better.
That was the only thing I liked.
NO hard feelings

--Fearless
| Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
  >.< WHAT?!

"And least of all, my heart"

I didn't mean there was NO meaning in the poem...I meant the little things thrown in here and there...maybe once or twice in a poem wouldn't have a real deep meaning. Not everything in life is deep. I like your simplistic additions.

"Ronny" Hilarious...
You are a great writer, it's not your hands. Your hands are mearly tools of your brain and heart. Those poems and those writings of long ago were yours then just as now...the same amazing writer.

I love you...keep writing.
ANdy
| Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by Olah89 | [ Reply to This ]


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