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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 678
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Why is it no one can understand just why I feel so bad
    Maybe its because they never lost everything they had
    Its hard to try to make them see why I hate my life
    I lost everything that I had even my kids and wife

    Everyone just seems to think it shouldn't really matter
    They just cant understand why my heart would shatter
    I lost my wife and best friend of forty years or more
    And just to top it off she proved she was a whore

    She couldn't just leave me and go off on her own
    She had to find another man just to set the tone
    She made it clear that we were through never to be again
    No matter how hard I tried there was no way to win

    Every one tries to say just move on with your life
    Sorry its not that easy when all I see is strife
    I sit alone day after day nothing else to do
    Everyone might just as well look and say FUCK YOU

    One day soon it will all be done and I will be no more
    All because my wife turned herself into a whore
    Maybe then they'll understand just how bad I felt
    I didn't want to play the cards that I was dealt




    Submitted on 2007-10-30 21:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry about what happened. The poem is amazing and i love the way you are able to portaril the cold feelings the world can cast on someone when they don't truely understand.
    I wish you the best of luck with moving on even though it will be a hard journey.
    I look forward to reading more of your work.
    TBF
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really gd but i dnt thnk u shuld have the capitals on letters like the j in just even though i know your trying to emphasise it it just doesnt look right but otherwise i think youve done a rwally good job
    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by hillynm | [ Reply to This ]


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