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Immortality Spoken

Author: Twisted
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I realized that after someone commented on this earlier, that at the end the repetition of the title is two entirely diferent words, and I want to point out, it was completely intentional.

109 short lines...I know, such a put off. I hope it's worth it though.

Immortality Spoken

I fall under this I have no control, please release me
mind and body, soul owned and held,
soon the promise that flesh will be served
mastered and alive.
By a god of lust,
flesh pleaser
(whispered words of control,
from lips of poisoned lust)
desire controlled and no one else arouses it
taken and claimed
as it’s own.

today and tonight forever
without my permission
(lust whispered more lovely
than love, dripped upon my flesh
your mark)

beauty unhindered and innocence still intact
a marvelous creature desired,
wanted and rare

taken without regard and marked for own purposes
pleasing for body to rock and spasm
with it’s first orgasm,
spinning the world in colors of fire
icy and burning passion
(drenched here upon his body,
his want for mine)
craving my flesh.

disobeying orders
to serve and be tasted
an affair to have
upon me
upon sins
lusting for grains of me against you
sublime natures and primitive desires,
bound by curse of lust

words exchanged, hates
meaningless to snake
body betrayed
mind falling to control
salvation lost in strangled cries
not yours
based upon the simple foundations:

rested, fallen, and lost, ecstasy forgotten—temptation

craved, given freely the screams of a broken soul,
metamorphing forms of pleasure
rocked and shattered
numbness setting and here
weightless, boneless artwork melting in his hands,
bones tasting sweeter
in the arms of pleasure rocked

delicate precipice carved and dripped
words echoed, breaking
unity and slow grinding
(inescapable grasp,
your moans not lost upon my ears,
only when your objections bleed)
beginning in one moment

flames erupted from wet caverns
will broken and rested exchanged
dignity lost,
burned paths of exotic,
used addiction of passionate
hate, parchedly drinking
ambrosia forced
to be tasted.

devoured without a hero,
and given up without a fight
pleasing atrophy.
obey the will of your
lover almost left
without a soundless word
(you wanted this
without realizing
the price of falling)
warned by divinity

and here remained performing skin tasting,
dancing without passion or will,
immorality spoken.

Submitted on 2007-10-31 00:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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