The Artist -------------------------------------------
Blood
Murcury Red
Warm dew drops on skin
Flood
Bleach white beds
Picasso's not dead
He lies here
In the smears
Of life
Strife
With paint brush percision
Slippery slits
Fit
Oil based viens
Paints a masterpiece
Of insane
Steel salvation
For a mental patients
Multiply like sins
Lost beginings
I cringe
At the sight
Of your Genius
I will admit I came to look because of the title. While not a big fan of the one word/few word lined poems, I realize they work for certain occasions and for certain people. Although I will be honest and say I don't like the poem as a whole, (its too hard reading for me) I like your theme and some of your lines if combined are terrific:
"Picasso's not dead
He lies here
In the smears
Of life
Strife
With paint brush percision
Slippery slits
Fit
Oil based viens
Paints a masterpiece
Of insane"
I would like better as:
"Picasso's not dead he lies here
In the smears Of life ('s) strife
With paint brush percision
Slippery slits fit oil based veins
Paints a masterpiece of insane"
But like I said I'm a lover of longer lines, but I really liked those lines in your poem - they are very well written and original
Nicely done
Submission Name: The Artist
