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    dots Submission Name: "Freedom, Forever!"dots
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    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1041
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 736



    Description:
       This is in dual tribute to two wonderful, near-legendary people who, to this day, reside high in my regard.

    To Guy Fawkes, the famous Englishman who plotted and nearly succeeded in blowing up the houses of Parliament (with the King inside, I might add)...but who was caught in a timely fashion and then hung, drawn, quartered and fed to dogs. A traitor's death, he died--for ideals that struggled on and eventually became commonplace.

    And this poem is also in remembrance of V, the centerpoint of DC/Vertigo Comics "V for Vendetta". For him and his ideals and his mask, a Guy Fawkes mask. Tied inextricably together, they were. And for his ideas, which didn't die with him and were instead, bulletproof. Because he's beautiful, magnetic, charismatic and just passionate enough to scare the underprepared. He promoted what he did because in a world that had forgotten democracy, there was no other way around it. That is the only reason. *smile*

    And there ya go. This also, in part, goes out to my beloved Dr. Samuelson and Franky the Troll. Teachers the both of them--and closet comic geeks. Amen.


    Far From Elite,

    -Sennie.


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    dots"Freedom, Forever!"dots
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    For a world destroyed by greed--
    Religion and lies believed--
    Even the government needs rebuilding;
    Eyes, in the shadows, watching still
    Devious smile frozen in place
    Open or solemn as he wills
    Mocking the head in general, here.

    Fighting for chaos and reform
    Order, by necessity, removed
    Revolution, through fire, is born;
    Exceptional form--the crescendo crash
    Voilà! An explosive rebirth--behold!
    Ever after, the impression lasts:
    Remember, Remember--Remember Always.

    **


    *In tribute to V, the revolutionary. V for Victory, my dear Edmond Dantés. You live on forever...because ideas are bulletproof.




    Submitted on 2007-10-31 21:45:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well i have no idea of the V tag or whomsoever specified but i get the poem.

    1. Boss you description must be intense to make the poem intense. one must feel fire than just read it.

    2. Voilà! - please explain not all know what it is

    3. Even the government needs rebuilding
    could have been rephrased as
    goverment unbuilt or goverments deformed something like that
    the sentence is the odd one out

    ...well these are the only things i can think about now.
    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      And I'm such a big fan of V. I loved your poem, i really believe our country, and the world needs a hero like V, as you said "Even the government needs rebuilding"

    Even more i love the structure, i think it's called thematic phrases, or UP and DOWN's. i might be wrong.
    Freedom forever !!!

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]


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