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    dots Submission Name: For A Very Special Ladydots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 784
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    Bytes: 1855



    Description:
       Something a little more upbeat about a lady I met


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    dotsFor A Very Special Ladydots
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    I finally found a lady that makes me feel so fine
    All I can really say is I have to make her mine
    She knows all the right things to do and say
    So I know if we're together everything will be okay

    She is so beautiful that I can't see
    Just what it is that she sees in me
    We've both been down that broken road
    We've both been carrying a heavy load

    We lightened our load the first night together
    Now that load feels light as a feather
    She told me the story of how she got here
    I let her know there was nothing to fear

    I wasn't like any man she'd known
    If she was with me she'd never be alone
    I'd stand by her right through it all
    Anytime she needed she just had to call

    I said all the things she longed to hear
    But it seemed to fill her heart with fear
    She had heard it all a few times before
    And she really thought she knew the score

    She thought that I might be full of shit
    But she knew in her heart that this was it
    This was the man to give her heart to
    He'd never break it or make her feel blue

    She had feelings inside she never felt before
    She didn't know what the future held in store
    She needed to know before it got too late
    Was he the man that was part of her fate?

    She wanted to tell him just how she felt
    When she looked at him her heart would just melt
    She could tell that he felt the same
    This was for real, it was no game

    They were destined to be side by side
    Wherever he went, she too would ride
    This is how I want this story to end
    She as his partner, his lover and best friend




    Submitted on 2007-10-31 22:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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