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    dots Submission Name: Better off deaddots

    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       heres a depressant for you.

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    dotsBetter off deaddots

    I revisit the past from time to time.
    I'm told its healthy to do.
    Walking the streets I used to toddle down.
    Let the memories come through.

    I sit down with those buddies of mine
    but the situation's never new.
    Theyre just as stuck as me it seems.
    Theres just nothin left to do.

    Some times I want a cleaned off slate
    Like those fresh, first days of school
    But the past piles up as we get older.
    Fresh starts are harder to pull.

    And on life trudges, weary and worn
    at much too young an age.
    Feels as if, in my existence's book
    I cant turn to the next page

    I'm waiting for a catastrophe,
    though Id take a miracle too.
    Something big, someone to love
    a new path for me to choose.

    'Cuz Ive walked down all the other ones
    they're not worth the second trip.
    "a waste of time's" an understatement
    the past can't tell me shit.

    It reminds me of my greatest faults
    the ones Ive worked to tame.
    the ones that feel like they're still right here.
    like they're written on my brain.

    The ten commandments of Josh are thus
    that thou shalt take thy life
    and with it do the worst you can
    and restart once or twice.

    Thou shalt ruin relationships
    thou shalt always feel behind
    thou shalt practice hypocrisy
    thou shalt barely control thy mind

    Worship the God's of alcohol
    Breathe deep the smoke of herbs
    care not for the lives of other men
    thou shalt never learn.

    And last, the final blow it seems,
    that I, my god, decree.
    Thou shalt know not in the least
    what you can ever truely be.

    Submitted on 2007-11-01 00:03:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am speechless, to write something like this must have taken some time at least and for me to write something for this I think i"ll have to read it ten more times to get it right. Love the whole Ten Commandment of Josh section, very creative without using something in existence, very good write, write on write on

    | Posted on 2007-11-06 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this. It feels like I know exactly what your talking about here. I've been down that road many times you don't know whats in store for your future. But from all the bad unfortunte events that have happen in my life , going to juvie and then having my baby boy, which don't get me wrong I love him but things would have been easyer if I didn't have him so young. That everything happens for a reason even though they might not be apparent at the time but in the end end everything really does happen for a reason. Bravo to a very well written write.
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      it really is a depressent. i like it for the words and the creativity but i dont like how sad it is. keep posting. well written.

    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      It winds down kind off, it's not really the best I've reead from you, but it's good. My favourite bar was the third, that thing was nice. Even the sixth was nice (even though I don't like it when people curse). That second trip is never worth it,
    So I Revisit it in verses and every time I rewind the tape calls out curses on me. Can I do a pin-off on this, this actually makes a good muse. Keep up stuff like this and I might want too try to get collab with you, I'm still trying to get some done with another user but whatt ya think? You know, like REMIX.
    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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