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    dots Submission Name: This One Last Timedots

    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsThis One Last Timedots

    Is it so hard to bear the truth
    On our sacred hearts.
    My darling can't you see
    Our endless crimes to love.
    The heated flames we burn in
    Saving our souls from pain
    But at least we could do
    Is try
    For this one last time

    The least we could do is try
    Try to mend our hearts
    These sacred lies
    And pretend that all hope is lost
    To taste your lips
    This one last time
    Our heavenly flames
    Scorching our blood
    And do you still care?
    If we give it one last try
    This one last time

    Is it so hard to believe
    I could change the times
    Our hearts would collide
    In this sweet suicide
    My darling won't you cry
    For one chance to be in heaven
    To guide our lives
    And change all lust to lost
    For this one last time


    -middle 8-


    But at least we could try
    For this one last time
    Before we die
    But it will be alright.

    Submitted on 2007-11-01 13:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      One Last Time.... All you need is one more try... just another try. And them BOMB its dones its happend... All you've longed for... all you've waited for ... you can try a hundred times and not until hundred and one does things go the way you've planned. This is very good. Although I'm stuck on this one and the last one I posted on I can't say which I like more...mmm nevertheless I do like a lot. Again this was very easy to picture in mind. Although I hate to say this but at first it seemed very much "alike" the previouse one. Nothing wrong with that but it just seemed tooo much alike. I began to think I was on the same page as before but soon relized I was not. But as I started reading more and more I saw and enjoyed the difference between the two... Once again Great job and keep up the writes I love them ALL

    | Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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