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Time curse

Author: Jessica Lynn
ASL Info:    22/f/mn
Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121 /119 /57
Words: 175
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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thoughts. . . .

Time curse

Time that slowly breaks the mind, and transforms the

body brings forth new life so as to take away and give

back. Sweet minutes bring forth the dawn of a new

century, a new person, a new world so thought out and

dreamed about. But wickedly this father time freezes

for a moment and clears this broken mind. And only for

a moment, this mind and these blind eyes are freed,

only to be prisoner to a painful second repeating itself

in the same immortal essence. Woe to the being

trapped in the hourglass, drowning in the seconds,

holding only the curse of restless impatience. Dreams

fall through like grains of sand, smothering this creature

with what could have been and what could be. When

the hourglass shatters, all that is left is the memory of

time, and the cruel truth of reality.

Submitted on 2007-11-01 14:37:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it. keep posting. this was a good read. ill be back to see it later. i love the imagery. peace

| Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]

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