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    dots Submission Name: Foreverdots
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    Author: bonita2689
    ASL Info:    18/f/in
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 42/58/33
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 63
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 492



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    dotsForeverdots
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    Fresh rays born of the morning
    glittered the dawn with a charismatic importance
    your soft palm embracing my own
    only to reassure this moment of phantasmal ecstasy
    could not be severed by a sorrowful cry
    nor a broken whisper
    this hope screams throughout the vessels
    of my beaten body
    reclaiming it's right to bliss
    our love will endure the mocking of weakness
    as the sun will triumph over the moon's violent glow




    Submitted on 2007-11-01 22:41:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The thing I love about this one is how it says the moons glow is violent. Cuz that just goes against most everybodies train of thought. They all feel the moon is calm and soothing, but sometimes the freakin moon sux arse, ya know?

    | Posted on 2007-11-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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