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    dots Submission Name: Redemptiondots
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    Author: bonita2689
    ASL Info:    18/f/in
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 42/58/33
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 61
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 363



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       im not a cutter, nor have i ever been, but this is powerful to me and I still love it


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    dotsRedemptiondots
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    Among the shadows
    darkness breathes
    the devil takes my soul for ransom
    a single light
    pierces the night
    like a razor
    explosive and phantasmal
    sharp to touch
    deadly as sin
    yet a tempting sacrifice it offers
    a choking solace
    embraces me
    as I surrender
    only awaiting another




    Submitted on 2007-11-01 22:46:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi

    I liked your poem, never heard this side of cutting before, I can almost feel the adrenaline pumping and all the comfort a cutter will feel during this act.

    Well done


    | Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by Polydectes | [ Reply to This ]


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