Sociopath
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Didnt start with a story, just the first line and its rhyme. Thats how most of mine begin.
Sociopath
I shiver though I'm never cold Honestly I'm not. I act like I feel the same as you I like my coffee hot. The light your shining in my eyes reminds me of a time lying on the beach with dad while mom sank in the brine. They took that dad away from me and paraded many more I laughed at all their man-semantics playing catch is such a bore. I'd rather see their insides, the animals I snare, I like to know their limits, give them all that they can bear. And now you say I've done some wrong but you see its not the case For though I did end all their lives those people were a waste Loafers, sinners, burdens all their days were a waste of sun So I watched them till I knew I was right and snared them one by one. And now you lean into my face and shout that I'm a monster Its hard to agree when, just like you, Honestly I'm not, sir |
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I liked this. It was a very odd read, but, I like the way that, at the end, I get the feeling the man is on trial for the alluded to murders. I would consider myself a sociopath, generally. I like the way it feels really unique. First time I have ever seen sociopathy taken on in such a way.| | Posted on 2008-03-11 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ] | Wow I love this peom. I could see it the way he saw the world. The eyes of a Sociopath must have been hard to capture but you did it so beautifully. Very good write. ^-^ | | Posted on 2007-11-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ] | Nice. This is a good poem. I've attempted to write something like this when I wrote "Hide this poem underyourpillow" but it didn't end up like I wanted to. Anyways good write! | | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ] | It's like you should be actor. You fully took the role of a person who twisted mentally. You are good, and you show diversity. You rhyme scheme was on point, flow and rhythm where flawless. The first bar reminded me of something I wrote, I was a love poem, cuz you know, that's mostly what I write. Here you are perfect, you were at your best on this. You are very convincing, like Ravenwolf said, You don't live in or near the DE, right. I mean those are the first to letters of DEATH. Oscar nominations seem fit. perfecto, my good dude. | | Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ] | There is a part of me that says I should be alarmed and run for the hills. After all most serial killers stem from Ohio, just joking ~ sort of. | However...this is actually very well written and right on for the title. It is actually quite "cute" the flow and rhyme sort of put a person in the role you took as the sociopath. Nicely written, Lisa ps: you didn't live anywhere near southeastern Ohio, do you? | Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ] | |
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