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    dots Submission Name: Dreamt Realitydots

    Author: dark_dreams6789
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 6/11/12
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 963
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       March 2007

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    dotsDreamt Realitydots

    Descending into deep confusion
    what I see is my illusion.
    Shrouded tales as gospel posed
    reality has been trasnposed.

    Mirrors casting odd reflections,
    odder still upon inspection.
    Grasping shadows, balance slides
    in this dimension solace hides.

    Playing games of cat and mouse,
    I'm lost inside this conjured house.
    Elusion is the master plan,
    the only way to win this hand.

    Maddening maze of persecution,
    trapped inside my own delusion.
    Slick thick black and chambered gloom,
    shades of darkness cloaking doom.

    Familar feel of trepidation,
    with no hope of consolation.
    Most other feelings lost by now,
    would lose this too if I knew how.

    Hazy views and half perceptions,
    is this real or mere deception.
    Cobwebs strangle struggling thoughts,
    for far to long this fight we've fought.

    Giving in to this intrusion,
    as they say, I'm disillusioned.
    Sinking slowly to the floor,
    far to tired for anymore.

    This game and lost mentality,
    has done me in, at last I see
    nothing is as it should seem.

    It's merely dreamt reality.

    Submitted on 2007-11-02 12:29:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is amazing. The point of it is so simple and yet extremely complicated. Keep it up!!
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

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