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    dots Submission Name: Naked frail Hollownessdots
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    Author: armand
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    dotsNaked frail Hollownessdots
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    thank you for making me
    feel so fucking dirty
    making me feel so alive
    with your guiltiness




    naked and frail
    looking for an end to
    all the desires that you have
    wrapped around me




    and I am just an error
    perhaps way out of line
    but thatís ok
    because this is life



    How can I
    not smell your lies
    when I am buried between yours thighs
    feeling the hollow of your
    precious memory

    and so

    here we are, again
    just pretend that we havenít been here, before
    to make it easier for tortured body
    bending over backwards for me
    donít you see the hollowness inside
    of my mind as you

    comfort me
    erase me
    color me back in to place again

    so I thank you for
    making me
    feel so fucking dirty
    making feel so alive again
    with my own guiltiness




    Submitted on 2007-11-02 13:05:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece, after reading your reply, seems to be the decline of a relationship - a love that has taken on so many of the qualities you are so used to.
    This piece makes me feel - I once, but thankfully less, revert to old feelings of acceptance and I, too, have teetered on the edge of sanity - like an ocean tsunami it has overcome me but I've come to distinguish between hysteria and actual growth experience and I am less of a people pleaser and more of a companion.
    Hang in there buddy...it does become a manifestation of love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      my problem is being too analytical with poems where i can only go so far. your poems are always that way. i can't read into them as much as i want to, and it drives me crazy...in a good way i'm sure though, because its made me addicted to your writing. i got the feelings of invalidity and longing and anger and emptiness transformed into carelessness from this poem. you both are guilty of something but it doesn't matter and through the sex it's momentarily gone, its a need to need and a want to not matter to or care about anyone or anything else...to just feel purely alive for a moment. a comfort, an addiction, a feeling you don't want/aren't ready to let go.

    i don't know, that's most of what i got from it. great write, as always.

    ~sabrina.
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by icaughtfire591 | [ Reply to This ]
      "How can I
    not smell your lies
    when I am buried between yours thighs"

    Wicked lines! I like this poem, it has got a nice touch of realism into it. I can totally relate to it. Been there pal. Women, eh women...
    | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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