Cage by jennah

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Author:	jennah
ASL Info:	19/F/IL
Elite Ratio:	4.07 - 101/73/22
Words:	93

Class/Type:	Poetry/Trapped
Total Views:	121
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	600

Description:
I got the first line of this from a speaker on Domestic Violence the other night, and the rest just kinda wrote itself during my ATMOS lecture today.

Cage

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Love is not a hurting word,
it shouldn't make you cry.
Love should never let you down
or ever say goodbye.

Love should never bring you pain
or senseless shaking fears.
It shouldn't make you shed at night
the weight of hopeless tears.

Love should never break you down
or cut you deep inside.
It should never harshly judge
or make you want to hide.

Love thats true cannot exist
in a world of hate and rage.
This is a thing that is not love,
but is instead a cage.

Submitted on 2007-11-02 16:30:09 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i agree with juss_kriss about not knowing love until you've lost it. Yes love hurts, its probably the most painfull thing anybody will experience, but the part that makes it so painfull is the same part of love that makes it so beautifull. If you don't love someone without reservation even thoug they probably will crush your heart than you can never give your everything to the person who wont. But given that this was inspired by a domestic violence seminar i see where your coming from.
| Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to admit I agree very strongly with your words
I myself have never found True Love as in a relationship and dont think I ever will
To me the only True Love someone will ever have is Family and True Friends
Excellent Job!!!
God Bless
Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  oh wow i really love this... i can so relate.... love is supposed to be this AWESOME WONDERFUL thing but omg its more like a cage of endless hopelessness sometimes..... great write
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by x_Broken_x | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting outlook on love. The poem was well written, even though I didn't care much for the rhyming scheme. What made me stop and comment on your piece, was one of your last lines.
"Love thats true cannot exist
in a world of hate and rage."

I have to disagree with that. Love is what pushes so many of us to stand up and defend our lifes, and family and our world basically. IF there was no war, would we truly know what love is? I think it is the hate and rag that makes us understand what love is truly about, because how would you know love if you could never lose it?

Other than that, this was a very interesting piece, nicely done.

~Kriss
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]

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