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    dots Submission Name: The EXdots
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    Author: Darklonelygirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    1.87 - 148/90/61
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 104
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    dotsThe EXdots
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    He was mine all mine,
    til' you came back into to his mind.
    It was just him and me.
    Like it supposed to be.
    Then you, THE EX, came into his view.
    You came running back,
    like a retrieveing mutt!
    He left me high and dry,
    shut me out, not caring if my heart died.

    I just wanted to tell you how much he meant to ME.
    He was my day and night.
    My rainy days and my clear summer evenings.
    The tissue for my crying eyes,
    and the subject to cramp giving laughs.
    He was my heart and soul.
    He was all this and so so much more.
    Yes i loved him with all my heart and I thought we would never cease to be
    that our love would never end.

    But I only thought a lie,
    and it was you made our love die.
    Apparently you meant more to him then me.
    and you knew that, you fucking bitch!!
    You broke it off with the one you had,
    just to ruin my life.
    To make me feel worthless, like a piece of old sundried dog shit.
    To make me go though a depressed state of mind.
    I hope you know that I cried myself to sleep for months.
    And that my heart will never be able to love another quite as much as i did YOUR boyfriend.

    It's been a year since then and i'm still not totally over the whole situtation,
    See i'm moved on from him.
    But I still hate your FUCKING BITCH ASS-SELF!!






    Submitted on 2007-11-02 23:56:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved the second stanza:
    He was my day and night.
    My rainy days and my clear summer evenings.
    The tissue for my crying eyes,
    and the subject to cramp giving laughs.
    He was my heart and soul.
    He was all this and so so much more.
    Loved the passion.
    Josh
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]
      this was bad but in a good way
    U are right on the money with what this feels like.
    | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by mekisha4ever | [ Reply to This ]


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