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Blown Up


Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86 /81 /90
Words: 39
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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Description:


Trent has me on this history and future thing, that has me writing up a storm.... sorry if some are more strange than others.


Blown Up



Fear, I've known,
Fear, I've lived,
Lifes, no more,
Mine, I give,
Time is gone,
No time is left,
The hour's here,
It's all bereft,
to late now,
we've messed up,
our lives, we feared,
Are all blown up!




Submitted on 2007-11-03 03:05:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cool,cool I like it its like modernish (if that is a word) and sleek.While still conveying a message.Then its short and simple.All in all a really good poem.About the description.If somethings on your mind let it out.Thats why we have this crazy little thing called the internet. *.*


The girl who cried wolf to much.
| Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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