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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHopedots
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    Broken people; broken world.
    A scar lies hidden in everyone you know.
    Striving people, striving perfection,
    Striving world, striving illusion.
    Strive people for that elusive god,
    You never know when you strike a chord.
    Slip and fall, stand back tall,
    Eyes wide open, listen for the call.
    Faith the bait; bait the fate,
    Hope and faith, stand up straight.
    Slope, grope, choke, then hope,
    Luck might fall in a lucky stroke.
    Blessed hope to temper time,
    To hope sprinkled sweet until you die.




    Submitted on 2007-11-03 10:22:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There was alot of.. rhyme and alliteration it was a very condensed piece, not going to far into detail... Time seems almost as if it is an after thought.. and hope seems to make its apperence at teh end but, then agian, I guess that is when it always shows up.
    | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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