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New world Order

Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
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Words: 174
Class/Type: Poetry /
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I just thought this up at 4:30 this morning
I just think this is how our government is.

New world Order

Tears, they stain, My clothes blood red
with no sign from which they'll end
the gratuitous gestures and lives we live
will help our government dish what they give

We cannot stop them, no matter the tries
forever we'll live on, as our soul dies
"Do what we say and your life will be perfect"
should we listen to them, is this way worth it?

Do we give up our soul and live on forever
or do we give up our lives and never surrender?
we can never take over, they rule too high
they tower above us, like the clouds in the sky

History will not change, and neither will we
no more are we allowed, to live like the free
This world we live in, and its unending torture
will eventually give in, and we'll die like before

Our time has come, no stopping now
make your decision, fight or bow
we DO NOT have a chance anymore,
do we live like slaves, or die on the floor?

Submitted on 2007-11-03 14:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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since i didnt take my hat off to you before i must definitly do so now my great poet. sincerly i loved the poem the firtst time but now it is simple wonderful.....

there are many parts of this that i thata really caught my attention was the following line.....

"History will not change, and neither will we
no more are we allowed, to live like the free"

the reason this strikes me is everyone country/person or act that has ever been made started like this , poeplto choose their lives and live with came with it victory or glory and as we welll know not everyone got their glory

but all in all im glad i took the time out to reread....

btw... sorry for the wait ive beena tad busy :)

-the girl who cried wolf to much
| Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is the united states government spelled out to the T it reminds me of the times when kings ruled and dukes were in every household

maybe when the french and the english were at war i like it though i think the beginning could be a little better though

towards the end you focus more on your rhyming than at the top suggestion do the same to the begining ,but thats just me

-the girl who cried wolf to much
| Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]

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