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    Author: crimson_panda
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      this made me think for like 20 minutes. i just kept thinking about this poem and how it seems to work wonderfully. ^_^
    | Posted on 2007-11-23 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      I did something like this once to the "Our Father", but I like what you did here better than mine. It kinda seems like the prayer was made for someone to do this. Some may think this is twisted, but I really like it. I'm adding this to my favorites'.

    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      this makes me think of a metallica song... enter sandman... in that song they have 'now i lay me down to sleep i pray the lord my soul to keep and if i die before i wake...' while also singing about sleeping with one eye open gripping your pillow tight.

    i think this has been done a few times before.
    i am not sure whether you repetition of darkness in the first stanza works for me.

    but good shot. lets hope this 'prayer' doesnt come to pass
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      that is very demented, but a wonderful twist on a prayer. although i do enjoy the lord better than the darkness. this poem is very morbid though, and i enjoyed it. this poem could be lyrics to an annihilator song or something.

    m/ metal!

    anyways, my favorite stanza is your third one. you should be proud of the thought you put into this. good job.
    | Posted on 2007-11-03 00:00:00 | by jesus etc. | [ Reply to This ]

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