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    dots Submission Name: Your Lovedots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    Description:
       Ehh, listening to Nocturne Op. 9 No. 2 beautiful song. Letters to words came out of my hands. Still raw I suppose. Enjoy.


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    dotsYour Lovedots
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    I know you will never understand me,
    never try to either,
    but why are these tears falling for you;
    for me?
    Why are they here
    I tried to ignore your neglet

    I still strive to be the best just for you
    even though it'll never matter to you I still try
    and when you ignore me, your child
    I still hope you love me

    if not love then at least acknowledged me
    I'm hoping your 'love' was to make me stronger
    I'm hoping your harsh words were to make me strong

    And while I write this letter to you
    I'm still hoping you at least loved me
    at least acknowledged me
    I've did everything I could to make you care

    and nothing has mattered to you
    I've become one of the best, but still nothing has changed
    Will this letter change you
    will this bullet change the way you think of me;
    your child?




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