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    dots Submission Name: Serious Gamerdots

    Author: sword stalker
    ASL Info:    18/female/home
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 27/27/16
    Words: 392
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSerious Gamerdots

    I turn on the console and insert the disk,
    I hold the controller tight in my fist,
    The menu pops up I select a new game,
    Itís time for me to put my opponent to shame,
    A fighter shooter makes no difference to me,
    For I am the game master, just wait and see,
    Letís star off with a race, so now letís begin,
    Iíll order the hardest track for my friend,
    I head to the ramp and use nitro burn,
    Then casually I glide to the other turn,
    The white flag is out, last lap ahead,
    By this point you must know you are dead,
    I speed through the finish, I won by a lap,
    You just were about to fill up the gap,
    Whatís this? Race and your thinking,
    An arcade fighter, what are you doing?
    I take Ryu and he chooses Ken,
    And itís now time for this match to begin,
    The voice yells fight and Iím off in a flash,
    Wile youíre stuck there without a chance to button mash,
    A 20 hit combo to start off the fight,
    Then 3 more kick hits while youíre still in flight,
    Now you are all beaten up and both my fists are broken,
    I finish you off with on huge Haya HADOKEN!!!!
    You start to get mad and you claim this is lame,
    Then you say why donít we try a real game,
    You take out halo and slip in the disk,
    When I beat you just donít blame the joysticks,
    I watch you as you immediately run for the right,
    Then I stick grenades to your by the fistful,
    I use active camo so you canít see me,
    Pistol whip, another point for me!
    A minute later Iím ahead by 5,
    Now all I have to do is survive,
    I catch the grav lift and head for the portal,
    Only 3 more seconds,
    Oh shoot I got shot and my shields are all gone!
    Oh well Iíve got this won,
    The buzzer goes off before I respon,
    I tell him good game thatís better than most have done,
    He hangs his head low and he looks at his feet,
    He has just tasted a bitter defeat,
    And as we leave I say it was done,
    And if heíd tried a little harder he might have won!

    Submitted on 2007-11-04 04:17:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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