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    dots Submission Name: the sunset in your eyesdots
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    Author: mekisha4ever
    ASL Info:    39yespleaseNV.
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 38/36/47
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       to Joshua G
    you are forever in my heart and on my hand.


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    dotsthe sunset in your eyesdots
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    we moved at the speed of light
    in to the sunset the closer we got
    the faster the sun went down
    just like our love for each other
    no time to wait or it might be to late
    for us
    our love like no other
    rushed in and rushed out
    we kissed and held hands as if it were our last
    and it was but what you gave me will last forever
    the sunset in your eyes




    Submitted on 2007-11-04 10:02:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thnx for you kind comment. Short but appreciative.
    I appreciate the reference to speed of light which is cunningly used because from my perception we are Light beings and thus we do `travel` as such. The closer you get to the `sun` of your Love through the fringe stages of sunset, the longer you want it to last. And donít want it to go away. So it is with Love. The closer and deeper you venture the more you experience the more there is to fathom the more difficult and complex it may become.
    You refer to your acquaintance as briefly which is beautifully setout from sunset to sundown is the most beautiful but short time experience. I liked it. My type of appreciative mind. Joachim
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is excellent,the closer we got the faster the sun went down, wow girl,wish I wrote that,the only thing I can say is maybe it could be longer no, anyway loved it.

    Diablo Tapitio "David"
    | Posted on 2007-11-24 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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