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    dots Submission Name: Teardrops dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsTeardrops dots
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    Teardrops




    A smile that shined in the sun.

    Eyes that reflected the rainbow.

    A heart that warmed the air.

    Falling....







    Strong arms that kept me safe.

    Gently hands that led me through.

    A sprite that shined brightly.

    Falling...




    These eyes release the regrets.

    Parts of lives memory faded.

    Wiped away one by one.

    As they fall.




    Submitted on 2007-11-04 15:34:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i loved this so much. its deep. keep posting. i really want to read more.





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is amazing. I love it the imagry and the simbolisim. . . . truely good work!
    I love the ending:

    "These eyes release the regrets.

    Parts of lives memory faded.

    Wiped away one by one.

    As they fall."

    Beautiful! Great piece, keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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