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    dots Submission Name: Who I Amdots
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    Author: heartless_
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       yeah i'm just getting back into writng and i know this probably needs a lot of work but its one foot back to being my self.


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    dotsWho I Amdots
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    When you look at me what do you see?
    Can you really see me
    Or is it just what I appear to be?

    Do you even care what I am?
    Or do you just see my shell?
    I am so much more than I appear
    And yet you wont get to know me.

    You look at me and all you see is,
    Blonde hair, glasses and big.
    You judge me by how I appear,
    And not by all that I do.

    To you Iím nothing more
    Than a waste of your time.
    Yet you canít seem to let me go
    And I donít know why?

    You seem to careless about me,
    Always remarking on how I look.
    Then dismissing me with out a second thought.

    To you I am no more than I appear
    What you see is what you take.

    Sometimes I wonder why I try,
    In the end you always walk over my hear and away.

    Just when I was going to give up,
    I saw a new side of you,
    One that saw me for me.

    You started to notice my work,
    And took interest in my writings.
    If I had a problem you were there.
    Still you just wanted to be friends

    I may not agree with you on that,
    But to keep you in my life,
    I would do anything for you.

    Iím just glad you finally see me for who I am
    And not just what I am.
    No more do you look past me,
    No more do you judge me,
    Now your just here for me,
    Not what I appear to be,
    Or what you get out of it.

    Iím always going to be me,
    I wont change for anyone.
    Now that you see this,
    We continue to grow closer each day.




    Submitted on 2007-11-04 19:16:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a perspective that I think a lot of young people have. The young evolve so swiftly, even day by day, that it's hard to even grasp oneself, much less another of the sort.

    Myself, I understand that I will not understand, yet resolve to accept anyway, be it another or even myself. Each person is a unique work of art. Never worry about what others think, each follows their own furrow.
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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