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    dots Submission Name: With a little helpdots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1099



    Description:
       I went and saw some old buddies over the weekend and wrote a little rhyme about it. Its a rap which is why theres some slang and little to no punctuation so read it accordingly.


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    dotsWith a little helpdots
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    It seems true friends last,
    I'm glad to say.
    Though we never see eachother
    we can spend a day
    Gettin lost, gettin high
    doin whatever we please.
    Never stopping, never pausing
    never awkwardly
    tryin to start a conversation
    or force a thing
    cuz we're still as close as ever
    and dont have to think
    of all the miles, all the months,
    that come in between
    when we're hanging out together'
    you know it ain't no thing

    And I'm glad for that dude
    cuz its been pretty hard
    leavin all you guys behind
    and it seems so far,
    not just the place you live
    but my life, Ive changed
    and yet somehow our relationship
    has stayed the same
    and Im thankful for that homey
    but I could never describe
    this to your face, thats why I place
    it in this lyrical vibe
    its a cowardice, I know
    but its all I can do
    I act the poet
    now you know it
    and this verse is through




    Submitted on 2007-11-04 20:46:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Friends are great!!! This proves how much friends mean to all kinds of people even the ones who can't let it show.
    Good write,
    -jenny
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      but I could never describe
    this to your face, thats why I place
    it in this lyrical vibe
    its a cowardice, I know
    but its all I can do
    I act the poet
    now you know it
    and this verse is through



    i dont like it. but i understand. this piece was kind of weak so if you ever do get the gut to show him take it out. other than this stanza it was great. a lot will relate.





    tina
    | Posted on 2007-11-04 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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