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    dots Submission Name: jupiter higgins: the amazing asswipedots
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    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsjupiter higgins: the amazing asswipedots
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    I AM!!!
    a hero
    i SWOOOP in to save you from the shadows
    the shadows that your doubts cast

    i am BEYOND these shadows
    i will SAVE YOU missus
    the costume i wear is a knowing look
    a comprehension
    EMPATHY

    you go into the world like a vaccum cleaner
    sucking up shit and grime
    empty these bags of shit on me

    I AM!!!
    a hero




    Submitted on 2007-11-04 23:05:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Intersting -- pretty enjoyable, hehe. Original -- yeah. I dunno, no suggestions really, it was good.
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      this was funny but i dunno. it was just....whatever.
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      HeeHee, It was trippy.
    The title reminded me of when in ninth grade and I called myself Jupiter.
    Whoa.
    And the poem seemed to mock damsels in distress.
    I LOVED IT.

    ~Karrie
    | Posted on 2007-11-05 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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